Rebecca's alarm started blaring at 5:55 am. She did not even hesitate that it was so early, she immediately got up. Rebecca burst out of her bed and immediately started to get ready. Her mom screamed from downstairs, "Becca, hurry up! Be ready in 5 minutes!" Rebecca chimed back, "Okay I'll be down in a second!" There was no time to lose, the tide was going to get too rough even if they were 10 minutes late. All ready to go in their swimsuits, Becca and her mom drove along the scenic highway to a nearby beach in California. The views were gorgeous, the water had the perfect tide, and there was not a cloud in sight. They hurried out of the car and jumped right into paddling in the freezing water.
I can't tell of that is a typo, but why is the significance of the big R? Besides that, I enjoyed the story and the dialogue so good job.
ReplyDeleteI liked your use of dialogue. It really put me in the scene. I really enjoyed your story!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your story. I liked how you emphasized the importance of this to the characters by making it so early in the morning. I wouldn't have gotten up that early to go to the beach.
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